Week 8 homework

Intervene in the narrative by telling the story of the walk to the tram stop which occurs on pages 43 and 44 from Johnno's point of view. Write in first person, articulating to the reader Johnno's thoughts and feelings about Dante, the visit and his reaction to what Dante did.

Remember that this is a narrative, so you should also narrate actions and include some dialogue.

You should begin by re-reading pages 43 and 44 to establish what the text contributes to our understanding of this situation.

You should also begin to practise the deliberate use of language features that will make your writing more effective - see the editing checklist.

                                                                               Editing checklist

1     Sentence length –varied length or deliberately chosen length.

2     Sentence openings –varied openings.

3     Punctuation – used correctly?

4     Have you tried to use something other than commas and full stops?

       Vocabulary – try to use the most effective word – look at verbs particularly.

       Have you tried to use examples of figurative language or imagery?